Sharing the Dark

Jim Stitzel

I dabble a little in a lot of things — writing, webcomics, gaming, photography, web design, music, and more. I write code full-time and words in the gaps in between.


We found each other in the dark some time later. Or, rather, the semi-dark. A crack in part of the tunnel ceiling extended through the rock over our heads and let in just enough light that we didn't require our lanterns. It did little to dispel the gloom to either side of us, of course, but it at least gave us a safe haven for our reunion.

You were already on your way back when I found you. You greeted me with a hug and a smile that was genuinely warm. I knew I'd been right not to worry, but your gear clearly told the tales of your travels. There had been hardships along the way. I could see those markings clearly, even in that dim light. But still you smiled, ever positive, ever optimistic. And this was part of why I chose to follow you into the dark. How could I not?

We walked together then, both our lanterns lit, the shared glow of those lights illuminating the path ahead of us more clearly than each had alone. We talked, voices low, exchanging stories and sharing experiences.

I didn't want it to end.


Comments (3 so far!)

ElshaHawk LoA

ElshaHawk LoA

I want to hug this moment. I love when you were worried about someone and find out that things were fine and they carry you forward with a smile.

  • #3139 Posted 7 years ago
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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

I love your idea of wanting to hug a moment. That may be one of my new favorite evocative phrases.

  • #3147 Posted 7 years ago
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Robert Quick

Robert Quick

Hurm. I agree with Elsha that this is a nice moment but I almost feel like it came too soon. I'm torn by the idea that this is a good sequel in the truest spirit of a Ficlatte (is this what we are using now?) and by the feeling that the tension at the end of the first story was completely nullified. On the one hand, this takes the first story and moves it forward without being a direct continuation of the scene which I think is good form for a sequel. But the idea that this person was moving into this dark, dangerous place in search of their friend created tension, a feeling that something bad might happen. All the tension vanishes when nothing bad happens and lots of good happens. Like I said, it's a good scene but I feel like it came at a cost. Maybe I'm too critical.

  • #3168 Posted 7 years ago
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The Watchers tell me you departed some time ago, that you walked into the tunnel by yourself armed w…

Into the Dark

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