Smoke and Metal
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The Priest lifts the lid away from the box and sets it to the side. The smoke inside the box swirls before him like an angry storm but remains in place for the moment. He dips a finger into the smoke, drawing out a long tendril of grey vapor. Then, with his other hand, he twirls the tendril around his index fingers, allowing some of the smoke to climb up his hands and disappear up under the sleeves of his robe. The smoke reappears again above his collar, wrapping around his head and face. His pupils dilate until his eyes are totally black, then return to their normal color. He grins, a toothy, malignant smile, then releases the smoke back to the box.
The medallion, still glowing with an ominous, green, sickly pallor, suddenly draws all the smoke from the box. The smoke surrounds the medallion, hiding it from view. It once again resembles a small, angry storm cloud, lit within by an eerie green light. Static charges shoot off the medallion like tiny lightning bolts, further enhancing the illusion of a storm.
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Comments (3 so far!)
Jim Stitzel
Somesuch, for sure. The Priest is a relatively new character, and the story so far doesn't reveal what exactly the smoke is, so there's as yet no context for the Priest's reaction nor for the merchants who brought it to him.
And anytime my writing can stretch a reader's vocabulary a bit, even if it takes them out of the story for a moment, I feel like I've done my job. :)
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ElshaHawk LoA
A priest has a tiny storm on his table, news at 6. Stay tuned.
The smoke is evil, that's all we know. It is taking form and has substance, yet is eerily malleable and can travel up clothes. The smoke seems bound by some sort of rules, I assume those set about by some magic spell. I wonder where you will go next?
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Robert Quick
Possession or somesuch. Even knowing what to expect, I feel like the priest is too calm. He needn't be afraid, he could be excited, anxious,guilty or something else. Having not read every prequel for this, it might be in his character to be calmly impassive and then I suppose it would be fine.
Not that it's here nor there but the word pallor I always associate with a pale white, so I had to go look it up and your usage is correct but it took me out to go check up on my vocab. Again, probably not something you need to worry about, but I thought it might be worth mentioning.