Faust Redux

rhubarb_j

South African.

Leafy goodness!


"My tongue may be twisted but I'll tell you no lies

Surely that's plain from the look in my eyes?

You're not making a deal with the Devil himself

Take a look around, inspect every shelf!

There must be something that catches your fancy

Go on, don't be shy - I can see that you're antsy

I won't force you to initial a contract in blood

A few notes will do, or in pennies - a flood!"

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"Gee Mr. Carruthers, my Mom just sent me down here to get her some aspirin."

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"Fine Billy, here you go. I'll put it on her account.

Damn kids. No sense for the theatre."


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Jim Stitzel

Jim Stitzel

Hah! I have visions of a Willy Wonka wannabe dancing in my head with this one. :)

  • #2443 Posted 8 years ago
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rhubarb_j

rhubarb_j

Thanks for the smiley face, JIm - I was hoping to put a little smile on a face or two with something short, stupid and light.

There doesn't seem to be a whole lot of funny on Ficlatte, and I think it's quite difficult to write something genuinely hilarious, particulary something with broad comedic appeal. I wouldn't even know where to start.

If anyone knows of any funny storys on the site, I would love to be pointed to them...

  • #2448 Posted 8 years ago
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Jae

Jae

Comedy and humor were generally not acceptable forms of entertainment as I grew up, though I've grown to appreciate both tremendously over time. It does make it harder to write them though. This was clever story and the format worked well at conveying it.

  • #2452 Posted 8 years ago
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rhubarb_j

rhubarb_j

Thanks for the kind words Jae.

I have always been in awe of the late Terry Pratchett's ability to blend humour into his tales. I think his novels probably could have succeeded as straight fantasy (without the humour), which I see as the key - the humour has to support the story, not the other way around.

Wish I could do that.

  • #2474 Posted 8 years ago
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